See me when all is said and done. I still miss you. For you are dead.
All that I cared and shared.
All that I keep in my head.
Take my hand tell me fair.
Take a breath...hold our air.
Release..relax...He's almost here.
Curtain calls upon....resumes attached.
Conquest and beliefs in question.
Heed not but hasten to facts..truth..love.
All that I cared and shared.
All that I keep in my head.
Take my hand tell me fair.
Take a breath...hold our air.
Release..relax...He's almost here.
Curtain calls upon....resumes attached.
Conquest and beliefs in question.
Heed not but hasten to facts..truth..love.
posted by john at 7:55 AM
1 Comments:
John
Thank you for leaving a comment on my blog. I don't believe I am qualified to judge the work of other poets, and I would never dare to do so on their own blogs in any case. I think a good way for you to get a lot of feedback, if you are not already doing so, would be to post at some of the online workshops where people post poems, receive comments and criticism, and comment in return on the poems of others. There are a great many of these, but I can suggest a couple of sites that you might like. One is The Critical Poet (LINK) which has a number of forums to post your work on. The other is Salty Dreams (LINK).
Hope that helps you. Enjoyed your work.
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